My older brother Steven is a very important person in my life, if i had to choose who the most special person in my life is, it would be him. He is around my height which is 6''1. since I moved to Israel i keep in touch with him almost twice every week and turn to him with every problem that i have. Him and my other brother Michael both work in the jewelry business which I'm looking into when i grow up(phr.). My brother is a very open minded person and he (is) also very smart which is what i love about him.

Steven is always really nice to me, although he can be a pain(phr.) sometimes because he is always telling me things to do, not in a bossy way though. He behaves very appropriately when he needs to, but when he's not serious he's a very funny person. I chose my brother Steve to be this special person because when I grow up i want to work with him and every time I talk to him he teaches me something new,(Start a new sentence here) normally i get very bored when people try to tell me things but there's something about the way he says it that makes me want to hear more. He tells me all sorts of things like lessons in life or even things about business. I plan to visit him back in New York in December during Hanukah, and I'm hoping to spend a lot of time with him. Growing up he's always been there for me and he still is now.

My brother Steve overall is an amazing person and i know i can always rely on him to help me with something, no matter what the situation is. There are many other people i can name that are significant in my life but Steven tends to always be right up there. I don't think anybody that has ever met him or will meet him in the future will have a negative impression on him because he's always positive. My brother Steve is the most special person in my life.


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Daphna.