Barcelona,Spain was a place I visited in 2002. Although I visited there for a very short period of time, I had the greatest time of my life. I went with my mom, my grandmother, my grandfather, who sadly past-away(sp.) two years ago, and my two uncles from my mother's side. This place is very special to me because its some of the most meaningfull memories I have of my grandfather(phr.), who I miss very much. I didnt get to see him much because I lived in New York, but everytime I visited he was so exited to see me as I was also.


We stayed there for a week, but the places we visited were ones i would never forget. There were places that were around 20 stories high and the architecture was very old fashioned. A very old fasioned place would be the "Sagrada Familia" which was unfinished until today, i believe it was left like that for a reason. I also ended up visiting a place which i never thought i would visit which was the Picasso Museum. Later that day we went to eat at this really interesting restaurant, the food was amazing! To tell you the truth, finding a place to eat was not so easy because my uncle who is religious always needs to eat at kosher places and i wasnt really into that stuff back then so i had to sort of sneak out to eat at other places. We also went up this mountain and my grandfather couldnt go up because he wasnt feeling so great, i still remember that until today because he said he would wait and we came back down after two hours and he was still there.


Overall my trip to Barcelona,Spain was amazing. I wish sometime in the near future i could go again with different people and different places because every year i hear new things. There are so many places in this world that if you visit, the memories will stay forever, Barcelona will always stay in my mind.

You've corrected most of your mistakes. I left marked in red the last mistakes. Other than that, your work is very nice and I enjoyed reading it very much.
Daphna.

My older brother Steven is a very important person in my life, if i had to choose who the most special person in my life is, it would be him. He is around my height which is 6''1. since I moved to Israel i keep in touch with him almost twice every week and turn to him with every problem that i have. Him and my other brother Michael both work in the jewelry business which I'm looking into when i grow up(phr.). My brother is a very open minded person and he (is) also very smart which is what i love about him.

Steven is always really nice to me, although he can be a pain(phr.) sometimes because he is always telling me things to do, not in a bossy way though. He behaves very appropriately when he needs to, but when he's not serious he's a very funny person. I chose my brother Steve to be this special person because when I grow up i want to work with him and every time I talk to him he teaches me something new,(Start a new sentence here) normally i get very bored when people try to tell me things but there's something about the way he says it that makes me want to hear more. He tells me all sorts of things like lessons in life or even things about business. I plan to visit him back in New York in December during Hanukah, and I'm hoping to spend a lot of time with him. Growing up he's always been there for me and he still is now.

My brother Steve overall is an amazing person and i know i can always rely on him to help me with something, no matter what the situation is. There are many other people i can name that are significant in my life but Steven tends to always be right up there. I don't think anybody that has ever met him or will meet him in the future will have a negative impression on him because he's always positive. My brother Steve is the most special person in my life.


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Daphna.